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AmeliaCogin

  • Romantic Short Stories Re: Always There

    Hi Roxy! I'm here to review, as promised! ;) Let me begin by saying that this was very sweet. Almost a little too fairytale sweet. The happenings of your story ...

    Jun 21, 2011
  • Welcome Mat Re: Heyyy I'm here :)

    Hi roxy! You'll love it here at young writers! Welcome and have a good time. I look forward to reviewing some of your work! If you need anything don't hesitate ...

    Jun 21, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: A Tweet

    Right...here goes...I have no idea what you're talking about, but it sounds great! I'm quite ashamed at how way-off i'm going to be, but, going by the title, does this ...

    Jun 21, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Child of misfortune

    Hello everyone! I wrote this quite quickly, so it needs a good nitpick. And, It's a fictional narrative ;) first part pending ;) *** A peachy moon, two delicate arches ...

    Jun 20, 2011
  • Historical Fiction Novels Re: Sharing light In Africa EXTENDED VERTSION

    Back again...Where were we? ;) She took out 5 pieces of cloth and 2 plastic cups. Whoa - this paragraph is Far too specific. You really don't need to record ...

    Jun 19, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Skin and Bones

    Hello Jess! I really liked this poem. Your prose was very controlled: you did didn't condemn; you almost sympathised, which I percieve was your intention. I feel the sorrow, pity, ...

    Jun 19, 2011
  • Historical Fiction Novels Re: Sharing light In Africa EXTENDED VERTSION

    Hello Pixie! I'll just be reviewing the first chapter of your novel today, as I haven't so much time this evening! I promise that I will read and review chapter ...

    Jun 18, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Sweet and Unspoken

    Hello. I'm Alia and I'll be reviewing for you today. Normally, I hate rhyming poetry. I find that the writers often forsake emotion and passion because they are so caught ...

    Jun 18, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Outlived

    Reviews are really appreciated! This is my attempt at a Haiku, and I think I've probably done it wrong. I've tried to make the underlying message as deep as possible. ...

    Jun 18, 2011
  • Other Re: Dear Mr. Rapist

    Hi. I haven't any nitpicks; I just wanted to let you know how brilliant this was. The issue of rape was exposed in a brutal yet sorrowful way. Your prose ...

    Jun 17, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: The story of your life

    Hi K. Thanks for your comment on my wall...I will write a Haiku one day... Anyway. I can't even say this was an interesting 'read': there was nothing to 'read'. ...

    Jun 17, 2011
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Battle of the Hopeless (Part 2 - Felix)

    Hi Polly. I liked this part. Your prose was methodical, blunt, and objective. On the downside, I'm not a fan of books in which the storyline centers around ghosts and ...

    Jun 17, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: I Do?

    Hi jess! Please don't forget about us here at young writers! Only joking - I'm so happy for you! I thought this poem was so beautiful. I feel your passion ...

    Jun 16, 2011
  • Poetry Discussion Re: How to (not) write a haiku

    Hi K, this page really was helpful. I've been wanting to attempt a Haiku for some time now, but wasn't sure how to go about it. Thanks for posting!

    Jun 16, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Highschool Days

    Hi! This was sweet. I liked your voice: I found this strength as well vulnerability. You've really captured how daunting it is, but put in perspective how, in the grand ...

    Jun 16, 2011


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