AlyssaKyle

Helloe there! For the first picture, I really like how you showed a different view of csomething so common that people don;t normally pay attention too. The intricate pattern of ...

I liked the flow of this. I'm glad you kept your rhyme scheme consistent throughout the poem, and the words you used to rhyme didn't feel overly forced like it ...

Now that I know this was menat to be a song, it works a lot better. It has good structure to it. Don't be afraid to deviate from your pattern ...

Despite what some people think, though the sentiments were a bit cliche, they really worked in this. They expressed the emotions in a way that the reader could comprehend quickly, ...

Very nice! I like what you did with this. Again, I like how we get to experience the sort of mental back and forth in the narrator's head. They know ...

This piece especially caught my eye because it was an assignment in my art class last year to draw a hand. I like how the fingers are slighty misshapen. It ...

I also like that we are seeing the close up version with the texture of the brush strokes. I can't tell if you made the photo balck and white or ...

This was a well put together poem. Although you sturggled a bit with the rhyming in the second stanza, they rhyme scheme was consistant throughout, as was the stanza structure ...

The only thing that bothered me was the rhyming/rhyme scheme. You had a pattern going, and then all of a sudden it would break and throw off the flow of ...

I certainly do not inted to rip this apart, becuase the writng does not warrant that. I would like for you to let us see some more of the world ...

I enjoyed this overall. I would have liked to see some more indirect characterization in the beggining instead of just telling us what they looked like. I wanted to know ...

I do not believe that your lines need to end neatly with a punctuation mark, It's one of the rules of peotry that you can do that. Personally, I am ...

Despite your request, I do not intend to tear this to shreds. I quite liked it. Okay, nit-picking time! It's 'pajamas' not 'pyjamas'. Also, don't be afraind to use pronouns ...

Thank you for tkaing the time to write this out and post it. It's bad enough that kids my age are acting like this. I think there are a lot ...

I felt a natural rythm as I read this, which is always a very good thing. Personally, I felt that the structure was a bit scattered. I found it hard ...