AllieTheWriter

Wow, this is excellent. Your writing is extremely descriptive and paints a gorgeous picture in the mind of the reader. It's also elegantly tied together, and your punctuation is exactly ...

I love your verbs. I really do. They're very clipped and straightforward, well-placed, too. And your descriptions, wow. My personal favorite was the one concerning the resurrected guitar: "In the ...

Very, very good. I really liked the quasi facade you had him put up; that his life was just an endless summer, when really, he's perfectly miserable for most of ...