AllieTheWriter

Thank you VioletJune :D And the second and final part is up.

They had never come back. Frank was in the park until closing, when a police officer checking for delinquents found him shivering under the slide. When he was brought to ...

HA! Italics fixed! And thank you much Sionarama :D *devours cookie dough* For others that read and get confused: the large chunks of words in italics are flashbacks, and consequently, ...

Sorry about the non italics in the rest of the second flashback. BB Code is unreliable. >_>

Analogous Souls Dud, dud, dud, dud, dud. Zip. Sniffle. A little girl sat alone on the curb, wearing down the rubber bindings of her sneakers as they thudded a steady ...

I agree with ScarlettFire on this. It's elegant, and simple. The rhythm is very smooth, and the imagery is straightforward yet symbolic at the same time. Really good! -Allie

Wow, this is excellent. Your writing is extremely descriptive and paints a gorgeous picture in the mind of the reader. It's also elegantly tied together, and your punctuation is exactly ...

New chapter is up. Thank you so so so much for all the great reviews! I tried to apply them in the next chapter, please let me know if I've ...

Her-shiver We’re a pair he said. Birds and worms I said. I love you I love you too Words are lies. Hollow, every one of them. The first words, the ...

Her: before you start Something you should know. Before you start. This story is about two people. One of them is dead. One of them is not. That’s all you ...

I love your verbs. I really do. They're very clipped and straightforward, well-placed, too. And your descriptions, wow. My personal favorite was the one concerning the resurrected guitar: "In the ...

This is something you have to read a few times in order for it to sink in completely, which is a good thing. Your descriptions are fascinating, and I envy ...

Doesn't EVERYONE want to be a Power Ranger?! Glad it translated into something a bit more realistic, though. :] I like it. Very honest writing. -Allie

Very, very good. I really liked the quasi facade you had him put up; that his life was just an endless summer, when really, he's perfectly miserable for most of ...

For awhile, I thought it was puppets. So the ending got me a little. Well done, though, I liked that you kept your descriptions colorful, yet vague enough to keep ...