Alliaaryn5665

Hi, While it didn't give me too many questions, it did pull me in. Good job, I loved it. Farewell, A.

Hi, Haha, I love it. I want to read more! Fairwell, A.

Hi, I love this. There are a few nitpicks though. Grammar! There's this too: “Mailbox!” she shouted, and I smiled as I as took off after her. We shot down ...

Hi, Here to review as a whole! Here goes: I'm just a girl you know, one of those Capitalization broken, CAPS insecure, CAPS colourful kids Caps? the ones you say ...

Hi, Honesly, I didn't really enjoy this. It didn't really grasp and hold my attention nor interest. It was very well-written, though it had a few errors. The -'s and ...

Hi, I thought I would review the poem as a whole. So, here goes: Wild, rapid movements, With which I express myself. There's nothing That can hold me back or ...

Hi, I wish there was more. I want more. This is just absolutely adorable, with absolutely no errors. Good job, made me laugh and almost want to cry. Farewell, A.

Hi, This was okay, but no one wants to read blocks of writing. Break it up into chapters. There were many grammatical errors. Farewell, A.

hi, Personally, I think this didn't meet the potential that it has. I think you could've done more, but good job! It was seriously gripping and I can't wait to ...

Hi, SHOUT OUT!!! I have no idea I've done! *BATTLE CRY*

Hi, I absolutely cracked up at Jake and what he said at the end! Oh my goodness, nice touch! I love this chapter especially. Though, I don't exactly see how ...

Hi, I really like this piece. Your imagery is fantastic, but your grammar isn't, in some spots. You forgot commas. I had issues with the dialogue. I could rarely ever ...

Hi, I very much liked this, though it needs to be edited. You forgot a bunch of commas, and at the end you should delete that last sentence. Good job. ...

Hi, I loved this!! I really loved the fist paragraph but the second could uses teensy bit more detail. I didn't quite understand it. This was very good! You had ...

Hi, I really enjoyed this. I love historical-fiction. This has an accurate portrayal of a soldier's view of a coward. I love how you had them as friends/family in the ...