Alice

Ok you're not supposed to critique a storybook, you add on to it. If you want to critique go to a different form, this is not the place for critiquing

My name is Alice, should I begin like David Copperfeild? K-7th grade I was born in a small town hotel in the same town I live in now. From kindergarden ...

People we've got to post, we're like taking forever and i like this story we've just kind of stopped.

"Well the people who owe me favors are dead so... yeah we are." "Perfect."

Megan i dont mean to be mean or anything but you aren't really part of the gang, please dont post again sorry! Alice helps rick stand and goes to help ...

*Dynamo's turn*

oh heck yeah Adam, i'm having a genius day! Sara put her hands on Greg's chest. She couldn't see anything, but she could feel it. Power beyond her imagination, power ...

*waiting for DarkLight to post

Alice hears her name and looks over at rick. "oh shit." She shoots one with a crossbow ticking them all off and setting them on her. She readies her katanas, ...

Sara's pacing stopped, she needed to think and pacing helpped but making sure she didn't run into anything created a lag in the thought process. "Alexx sit down over here." ...

Rayan saw Rykan dive into the water and felt sorry for him. She knew how much he hated to be in the water. "Captian!" he shouted. "Keep your voice down ...

Alice uses her katanas to cut goblin's heads off left and right, but more keep coming. Thank god, she can see Adam and Matt.

"Damn, that was my plan," cole said scarcastically. "But really now, i have a plan like that, it just involves getting there first." "He's lost his mind hasn't he?" Sebastian ...

Denouement are you from ireland?

I know that was prolly confusing but much better than killing Sara off, i didn't want to create a new character and i chickened out. :D