Alice

"It couldn't have been that bad," Cole insured. "Nothing but old fashioned gowns," she faked a shiver, "and no boy friends, my grandparents are still living in the 19th centuary" ...

I added a little bit, is it any better?

I don't like harsh critiques, as in they do nothing but point out whats wrong and you get the mean vibe from the wording and such. But what I dislike ...

6/10 it seems like its from one of those realization books. "No worries, Jet, I'm not gonna kill myself yet, I've got one more tale to tell."

Ariana and Tera rode north. *Uber holy pants, I can't think of anything to write*

And it was over, well, maybe not over, but you know what I mean right?

"Is love a fancy or a feeling? No, it is an ever fixed mark which looks on tempests"~Shakesphere. (The only part I remember) What is love really? Love is the ...

No letting this die people!!!

Alice and Nutty hear the commotion and run down the hall. "Adam!" Alice shouts when she sees adam. Doing the only thing she could think to do she connected her ...

Thats so awesome, it reminds me of something I'd do, just lean against a building listening to music randomly. ((This is my 100th crit, sorry its not that good though))

Matt click the thing on my signature =D

4/10 what is it exactly?

"Oh sorry," Kevin said, "well, can he sit here?" "Sure," she said, clearly annoyed and walked to the back of the room. Music class was so dull for her, she'd ...

toss

granted, but you don't wake up I wish I were happier