Alfreto

Hi, I noticed you were new here so welcome to YWS ! I haven't really heard of the book or movie of Edward Masen, but I'm getting the idea that ...

Hey I'm Alyson, and I'm sorry I don't have that long to do a full review, but I can tell you right now that this is really really good. From ...

Ok the only two things I noticed is that around the center of your story you statred saying "before" alot. Maybe it wasn't that much, but it was starting to ...

I haven't seen something like this in awhile either. I really liked it! You did good with the humor. The only thing is there is so many things happening I ...

Hi, I'm Alyson, and I will be your critque today :) "I'm not!," She said giving me a real smile, "I'm a little sad, but I'm fine. I'm more happy ...

hey, I though your story was ok, some parts were a little too dramatic though. You did a good job in including the major points in writing: Character, plot, scenerary, ...

Hi my name is Alfreto and I will be critiquing your work :D “Keep moving.” the grungy guard spat at the line of male youths. that was the only grammer ...

WOW I really liked that one! :D I think you described it extremely well from a ten year olds point of view. yes it was short and I wish it ...

OK this story is AMAZING I love it! I love the whole story line and all the detail. You show all what your MC is feeling. I would like to ...

OK, I'm going to honast with you and I apoligize now if I seem crude, but heres the criticque. I didn't see the point in that first chapter and if ...