Afyr

I've rewritten this prologue. It should be on this link I've changed quite a few things on it.

I re-wrote this completely. Now what do you think? PROLOGUE A tall building atop a hill rose out of the mist. It was all that was visible for miles around, ...

It's good. I've only done one sonnet myself-I'm not ecstatic about them, especially the rules you must follow.... :o That being said, the only thing that would technically need fixing, ...

I wrote this in five minutes yesterday morning... enjoy... There was an old man from Dundee Who every day swallowed a pea But one day, the cook Who was reading ...

I think it flows very well, apart from the last line. It seems missplaced, maybe because it doesn't rhyme with anything else... But I'm not sure.

In one of my stories I'm killing four of five main characters. But they have to die! One of them wants to die anyway, but they all sacrifice themselves to ...

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'Fixed'. (I hate things when they have huge spaces between them. Especially speech.)

This sonnet has no name, if anyone can suggest one that would be useful. Enjoy. Look up high and maybe you will see, Soaring in the open clear azure, A ...

Prologue of a story I'm writing. I like it, and I was just wondering what everyone else thought. If anyone's interested, it's 2 and a half A4 pages long in ...

That's a quick sketch... That is brilliant. I think the blank face adds mystery, whether the face is meant to be a mask or you just haven't got around to ...

Cool. I think you do a great job of creating the characters, especially - strangely - Seira. I can imagine being her. The description is also good, and I can ...

I almost cried. I hate emotion. *attacks all emotion in the world* MWHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *is :twisted: and slightly hyper @ the moment*

I think it would be better if the dragon had front legs and it was turned 90 degrees some way... And the guy person thing looks interesting... :D