Aedomir

Author's Note This is part two to the first chapter, some of you have read part one and this will not make a lot of sense unless you have. Thanks ...

Fantasy! I love fantasy! Just the thrill of living in my own world that I created really excites me! Hi, I'm Mark, and my username is aedomir because that's the ...

I think I will read your piece and comment as I go along - I'll start with problems first... the song innocently continued. and "Blackbird?" She guessed innocently. Try a ...

Thanks, I'll post part 2 to chapter 1 soon. It will be around the same length, 700 words or so. It might be quite sad though... that's all I'm saying... ...

I am so pleased with the responses I have been getting, thanks, both of you. You're tough when it comes to grammar! But fair call, it seems a lot more ...

That was a very well-written, amazing yet serious and humourous all the while! I just summed it up there! I didn't read the first part I am afraid, but I ...

Now I think about it, this place is like something I have dreamt about. Lots of people my age offering help to one another, interesting with kind and friendly people. ...

That was very good, suspense-packed piece, with just a bit of criticism: You used 'Earth' and 'People from earth' too much. Earthlings is good, but there only 3 terms for ...

Raven is a cool name, really rare ovoere here in Angleterre! You sound like a nice person, I'm Mark, nice to meet you! I wich I was this interesting lol.

Thanks again, that dying thing was really irritaing me! Wow you're great, I'll change it to pg-13 if I can.

All the mistakes have been found I see, but apart from that, I really like your style. That was a very cute piece, quite sad in parts as well! As ...

Hi, welcome to the community! I only joind today but I am sure that like me, you will enjoy this society to the full! Good luck!

I think that the joke was wuite funny, but I think you could actually make this into a nice novella if you work on it and puit some effort in.

That is the type of Romance novel that I would buy. The pace was perfect and I found myself beginning to fall in love with your characters! The start was ...

I really like your style. I find that the drab, 10 page endings of stories bore me like hell, but that got to the point, no faffy waste of words. ...