Aedomir

Hiya there! I don't know anything about poetry, but wondered if you'd like my thoughts: 'I’ve been waiting since 3:65 yesteryear to see you in my room, gnawing on an ...

Aedomir vs. Urkla Aedomir smashed a heavy blow into the troll's side. It roared and leapt apart, sending Aedomir soaring into the sky like a canonball. He came down with ...

:-D! lol thats so random! very amusing, just one thing... where am i? lol jsut kidding XD keep making these, they're funny! I dont really get it, but that's why ...

Hiya! No one hs critiqued this yet? OK, lets see what we have here. You don't mind? Thought not! 'annika said aloud as if needed to convince herself.' Pick one ...

Hiya there! This is good, very very good! 'We shared crayons and blocks. We shared snacks and naps and secrets. We lived, laughed, and loved together. But, it's over now. ...

I don't know the first thing about poetry, but I liked this. I find the lines a very long, and perhaps you can seperate these out more, but I don't ...

I really liked this, but don't fall into the trap that many others do, and write a fantastic piece but end up acting it really badly. I liked it, not ...

Hey there! Let's see what we have shall we? 'some mythological creature had reportedly appeared to her' the 'to her' doesn't fit in or make sense, chop it off. 'The ...

Hiya! Let's take a look here shall we... OK then, first things first. Why the factfile? Writers say that by putting a factfile you can't be bothered to write all ...

Hey there! Long time no see :-D 'But sixty percent of time' I know it needs to fit a certain amount of sylablls, but if it doesn't fit, rewrite it. ...

I don't really know what this is, or what to take frm it in fact. It was intersting, but I am not sure what the intended point was. Yes, this ...

Hey there! Now, what do we have here? 'She was slain by her own toiletries.' I am not sure whether you were going for this, but I thought it was ...

I havebn't heard the lullaby, so I can't relate to it and at a bit of a loss. But after rading this, I can tell it was based from sort ...

Hiya! I feel a bit guilty, I haven't read any of your other stuff, but still, let's see what we have here. 'All his life he had been fenced in; ...

This is really good Kalliope. For a moment I had forgotten what forum I was on, but after reading the first lin I instantly knew it was romance. I like ...