Adriana

Amazing poem! Congratulations! I love the fact the it doesn't rhyme but still flows nicely. I tell myself that it'll pass and know it's a lie. It doesn't go away; ...

This is REALLY good! Congratulations! I don't have anything helpful to say because I don't think you need any help here. Loved your poem! Write again soon!

Oh, this is great! I just think that stanzas are needed here. My idea is: I lay and look up at my ceiling because it is the only thing i ...

OOHH! You deserve all the likes! It is so nice and funny! Congratulations! Sorry if I can't help, but I don't think there are much things to be changed.

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Hi! Welcome to the YWS! I just loved your poem! The descriptions you made are really good, it flows perfectly. And the end is so nice! A silent tear escaped ...

It happened so long ago That the oldest star that light up the sky we see Was only a spark playing in the dark And didn’t even know that a ...

First of all, I loved this!! But I don't like how it looks... Maybe you should write like this: The stick burns, ashes fall. I see your face in the ...

Hi, Vettan! First of all, I so loved your poem! The time has stopped, she came to visit And silently was standing by the door She did not move, nor ...

Hi, Jalmoc! I really liked your story. It is full of emotion and the imagery is great! My favourite line were I watched as leaves fell around me, circling in ...

Little Bird, nothing makes sense for me. I used to have friends, but now they are gone. I used to have a girl, who was pretty like a swan. And ...

I so love it, Soulkana!! I love the way you introduced the girls. It is lovely... Paling she glances at me and then at the ground. “My name is Perdita ...

I SO LOVE IT! Your story is so breath taking, and perfect! I couldn't stop reading it and almost cried at the end. I mean, I thought the story had ...

Hello, JOY!! Let me introduce myself. Obviously, my name is Adriana, I'm 18 years old, Brazilian... I'm still learning the English Language so if you read any of my stories ...

Oooh, I love it! I know the subject is sad but you made it sound sooo... lovely. There is something captivating in your poem and I liked it really much ...