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Hey, Ginger. :) Adox here to review the first chapter of the story. I have just a few nit-picks to go over. First, I somewhat disagree with the first reviewer ...

Kay, so, I'm just gonna go over the few bad things about this. :) Survival is the struggle. Trust , is the will of life. A comma isn't necessary here. ...

I really enjoyed reading this. Your writing kept my eyes glued to the page the whole time. A character in a lot of short stories are Mary-Sues, even the rebels, ...

This was well written, it just lacked some punctuation. It held emotion, though, and kept me reading. :) I thought of you with love today Comma But that's nothing new ...

I really liked this, but there are a few things you could do to polish it up. :) They're waiting, watching theres There's, not theres nothing I can do I'm ...

I really loved, loved, loved the metaphors you used. The purple oval one, the one about trying to go faster and slower in the car, every single metaphor you used. ...

I loved this whole thing. :D There once was a young girl, smart and slick Her favorite things to use were her pen and her pick Period. She played her ...

That was gorgeous and beautiful. Amazing job.

I loved this. It showed what it's really like today; it seems like people can't like different things to be cool. They all have to be alike. They all have ...

I really liked this, and there are just a few things in here to correct. I lie awake in moonlight; swear I see your face. Hoping for the future, just ...

Welcome, welcome, welcome! I reviewed a few of your works a little while ago, and you replied. Your an awesome writer! :D My names Kinzee, by the way, as well ...

Swirling above my head. How do I want to feel? Which way should I turn? As the first stanza, nothing really popped out to me to continue reading. It didn't ...

What I thought of this as a whole: It could be improved. It's a bit confusing in some places. Also, it seems like her father is waaaay over-board protective. Maybe ...

This poem seemed very up-lifting, somehow. Very high-spirited, I guess. It's lacking comma's, and periods, but other than that, it's awesome.

This was short, sweet, and well-written. :) My hand reflects my work Callused fingertips Ink-stains rampant. My work reflects my soul Raging emotions Tumultuous feeling. My soul reflects my God ...