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Re: picking oranges in Westminster, CA
All I can say is wow. That was written really well. I don't usually like poetry that doesn't have capitalization but how could I not like this? You put such ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: A Call to Arms
Oh, wow, that was beautiful and tragic... I really don't have anything bad to say about it. It was really sad and just really well written.
May 12, 2011 -
Re: What is it?
I really liked this. :) [quote What is it? What is it, That calls out to us? This stanza doesn't really have a hook to it. It doesn't draw the ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: Let me introduce myself...
Welcome to YWS, Shamrock! YWS is awesome to get amazing writing tips and critiques. Everyone here is so nice and wonderful! I know you'll love it. :) Nice to meet ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: Wild Emotions - "Affectus Torva"
I'm not good at critiquing acrostics, buuut, I really like this. :) You described emotion well, and I really liked this piece. :)
May 12, 2011 -
Re: Redemption
This is sad and happy. I love it. :) I'm really sorry about your friend, by the way. Redemption Here I sit as your last breath has been taken. Gone ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: Inspiration and Writer's Block
I adore these! :D The writers block one is PERFECT for how it is to have writers block! XP Awesome job on that. And on the inspiration one, zomg! Are ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: Look, Ma
Wow. That was really good. :) Though there were a few small mistakes in there. Look Comma Ma, it's your grandson . . . Hold him tighter Comma momma. Watching ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: With no tears
I'm not really sure what I think of this. It seems like it's all about getting drunk or high and doing some not so moral things while there drunks. Okay... ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: Don't Greet Me
This was lovely and adorable. :) Though, some parts you told us instead of showing us. I'll go through here and show you which parts I'm talking about. :) Yes, ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: Cancer
This made me cry. I don't know anyone with cancer personally, but, I pray for those who do. Its so horrible what those with and those around them have to ...
May 12, 2011 -
Re: Not an Angel from Above
Though you know my opinion on these matters, I still really enjoyed this. :) No one deserves to be judged, your right. So, awesome job on that. Now onto nit-picks, ...
May 11, 2011 -
Re: To YWS (Happy Sixth Birthday)
Even though I'm just reviewing this now... Go YWS. :D You wrote this awesomely.
May 11, 2011 -
Re: Spider Web
I really enjoyed reading this. :) It has a lot of meaning to it and emotion under it all. Kudos to you for that. :)
May 11, 2011 -
Re: Sollicitus Intus - "Anxious Within"
All of your acrostic poems have some kind of deeper meaning. I love it. :) Kudos to you for writing some that are different than the others on here are. ...
May 11, 2011
