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Re: Believing Reality
We sat in the car, you stared smiling at me. We didn't know what was to come, but we weren't worried. You were still here with me. It was two ...
Oct 19, 2011 -
Re: Fireworks
I really enjoyed this poem. It made me look at the Fourth of July in a different way. You really gave the reader another aspect to look from. There is ...
Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: Why Me?
A/N: Part of this was saved, unfinished on my laptop, and when I found it, I couldn't resist finishing it. But I'm not quite sure what I think of it. ...
Jun 23, 2011 -
Re: Booty Shorts
I really liked this. :D I mean, I wear short shorts, but they cover everything that need to be covered. Some shorts just don't need to be worn. You put ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: Empty Mind
All of your acrostics are filled with extremely colorful words, and paint a picture in the readers mind. Whether it be a good picture or a bad picture, it gets ...
May 13, 2011 -
Re: A Piece on Education
I really liked the topic this article is on. I'm home-schooled, and I have over-the-phone teachers. My mom doesn't teach me, because we'd probably get upset too much, but I ...
May 13, 2011 -
Re: So Bradford Wrote
I love acrostics, and this one is no exception. It wasn't anything that'll change my life forever, buuut I don't think it was meant to be. It was meant to ...
May 13, 2011 -
Re: Hey everybody
WELCOME TO YWS! :DDD Even though I'm a bit late. WELCOME, WELCOME, WELCOME! You'll love it here; theres great critique for writing, and wonderful people. :) Its nice to meet ...
May 13, 2011 -
Re: Broken Soldier
I really, really like this. I'll go over it stanza by stanza. :) Broken solider says he is letting go Comma Crying, his girlfriend begging no Period He is leaving ...
May 13, 2011 -
Re: Untitled...What do I call this?
ZOMG. This is really, really good. :) Why does evil live? And good seem s to die? We are like dust in the wind, It’s just a matter of time ...
May 13, 2011 -
Re: A Fake Smile
I hide behind a fake smile dying inside Hoping you'll see and finally come save me but still I'm alone waiting for the shadows to consume me I hide behind ...
May 13, 2011 -
Re: The Perfect Girlfriend
You wrote this really well. The content of the poem surprised me from my assumption about the title. It was angsty, and it showed vengeance. Wonderful job. :)
May 13, 2011 -
Re: Hoping For You
Hm. I'm not sure what I think of this. I mean, I did enjoy reading it, and it does hold something, but it also lacks a few things. :) Sometimes ...
May 13, 2011 -
Re: I believed in fairies.
Oh, this made me tear up. Just the other day my cousin and I were talking about how quickly our childhood is passing, and this just enforced the feeling. I ...
May 13, 2011 -
Re: Merely a Feeling of Confusion
I loved this. :) Love is an illusion, Merely a feeling of confusion. It slowly and silently, Sneaks its way in. I love these first two lines, as well. And ...
May 13, 2011
