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I fixed Kasey, thanks. Do you think it's a sign I used to big of words that I sent people to the dictionary?

Thanks. Any other suggestions anybody?

I had a great rythm and flow, it kind of had a swaying feel to it. But apart from that... I don't want to go so far as to say ...

I really liked this, and you should definately keep working on it. It would help if you made it longer, to add more to the thoughts you have here, and ...

I really like the first verse. Except I might take out the zombie reference, it doesn't really seem to match. Also, I agree with Seraph, I'd take out moonlight. To ...

[pre]Love: the paradox that in the telling you have to lie in order to tell the truth; love that it is a good way to show the world as it ...

Because if they didn't exist they couldn't insist on existing. Why do so many movies insist on using cliches?

Granted, but then the monkey rips it to shreds before you can turn it in. I wish that I knew "what I want to be when I grow up."

Who's up for a new category? Somebody suggest one.

Maybe it's just that I don't really like modern poetry, but I didn't really get this. And I didn't really get anything from it. Of course, it doesn’t particularly strike ...

Like everyone's saying, if it sounds right for the sentence, absolutely do it. Just not too much. Once I was reading this children's chapter book to, well, a child. It ...

Granted but they all tell you you're terrible so you get depressed and quit writing for good. I wish that I could watch Becoming Jane right now.

Murtagh

Thanks!

Note: It makes perfect sense if you put in punctuation in the right spots: "I saw a rooster. In the mail, I saw an envelope" etc.