Adnamarine

Another excellent piece:) I think I can offer more suggestions for this one than for the other, though. And I will try to meet you there. I would get rid ...

This was excellent. I loved how you led up to the bit about the paper. And perhaps that I why, This line doesn't make sense. Maybe it was supposed to ...

I made some more changes. I'm not sure if they were exactly what you were looking, but I hope I've improved things some. By 'mad', I mean crazy mad. Insane, ...

It was definately a sound piece of work, and I can't really find any real faults with it, it just didn't dazzle me, I don't know why. One thing though: ...

Oh, gosh, I loved this so much:) However... (ah yes, that inevitable word...) when my head used to make sense. I hope you've forgotten me easily. I have trouble turning ...

Absolutely excellent. I don't really have any real advice of my own, I just thought I'd pass on some that I've been given, that italicizing things is something that you ...

It's good, I just don't get the references to sand... May I wish to hold it all the time. Do you wish that you hold it all the time? Or ...

Yes, I do know what a pantoum is, but as Cade already pointed out: Ideally your lines will form sentences, not be sentences in themselves. *adna*

Hey weather - I really liked this, but I think that the last stanza detracted from the rest of the poem. It didn't fit and it wasn't as powerful. It ...

I really like this, but just a few things. If you ask me for my name, I will tell you I have none. This line just seems to long. You ...

why thank you

I made a few changes, including the italics/bold thing. Is there anything specific that didn't make sense to you, or was it just the whole thing in general?

You're absolutely right. I would even know how to begin fixing this. I think the only reason I posted this and thought it was worth anything is because I had ...

Meggie wandered over to the counter and poured herself a fresh cup of coffee, no cream or sugar. She walked back to her desk, wrapping both her hands around the ...

They thought I Followed him like A lost puppy. Did I? They said they Thought I Loved him. Did I? I wanted To love Him. Did I? Did I want ...