Adnamarine

Very very interesting. I do believe you surprised me into liking it:) One thing I don't really get is the random inserted 'yes's in the last stanza. Something about their ...

I haven't actually read the first part, but I don't think that affected the way I read this. It still made sense, and all that. A lot of times one ...

Hiya Nick! Welcome to YWS! If you've been looking for a forum to stick with, you definitely found it:) The vast vast vast majority of us couldn't leave this place ...

Hiya Angie! Welcome to YWS! Whoo! Poetry! That's my favorite thing to critique, so if you ever Ever want one, definitely let me know! Have fun checking out the incredibleness ...

Hiya! Welcome to YWS! -Check out the FAQ for some help learning your way around the site, it's quite good. -Before you post some of your writing, please write two ...

This is too short to be properly developed, for the subject you chose. What does getting ice cream show about being best friends? Sharing an umbrella? Walking? It needs way ...

This was beautiful! I adored it! I love the language you used in this; it was lovely, and perfect, and unique. I loved 'undulance' and 'cerise' especially:) "Slow over the ...

Except, his evilness will turn on him! See, since everybody is so confused by it, you, Nate, can't be sure whether the people who rated it high really meant high, ...

Sadie is dragged by the arm through the crowded room, which is suddenly in uproar. Everyone seemed to be running around, though she didn't see what good it was doing. ...

Like I said, you need more SDT in here. You're telling us what she's doing, but not how she feels, not describing her cry for help, how it feels to ...

Hey Iya! I'm glad you came, despite your nervousness. I'm the same way, sort of. Except, I'm only nervous with people I know. It makes it easier to show it ...

Hiya! (love your name by the way) Welcome to YWS!!!!!!!!!!! This site is incredible for helping you "delve deeper into creative writing." Everyone here is extremely helpful and friendly. Before ...

You expressed this very well:) The first thing I noticed, though, is that it seemed kind of rushed. Maybe it would help if you merged the first two verses and ...

Hiya C.J.! Welcome to YWS! As you can see, everyone here is just brimming with helpfulness, so I'm sure you'll learn your way around here in no time:) *hands over ...

Good for you:) What kinds of things do you like to write? Welcome to YWS. If you want, check out the FAQ . It's really helpful. If you have any ...