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Palantalid, I am genuinely impressed. This is stunning. And I say that rarely, trust me. This first thing I want to point out is that you need to make sure ...

Darling, how can you hate this? It's wonderful, and I can certainly see how it won first place. There are really only a couple things I would change. First, the ...

When I woke up, everything was still back I think you meant “everything was still black The very first thing I noticed was that the majority of you sentences start ...

marbles the well ‘Marbles’ is a little awkward, probably because it’s not a real verb. I think you would be better off writing this as a comparison. “A ghostly white ...

You know, I've been looking for something that I can read and say, "This is what I want to be doing right now. This is original, and fresh, and deep." ...

Hi Demi :) First, punctuation. Right now you’re somewhere in-between using all the correct punctuation, and not using any. You have the periods at the end of the stanzas, and ...

Gah, 3 reviews a day makes it sound so simple that I'm going to feel depressed if I don't do it. That's some motivation for you. Well, I guess that ...

Might a venture a guess that you write poetry? I don't know, just throwing that idea out there. Feel like sharing? What do you write? If you do write poetry, ...

In the corners of my mind Is the music, The haunting music, Of a string quartet. And when I dance On my toes, I dance to the cellos And violins ...

Uh oh, I smell trouble. I hear Connie is taking June to the wedding. :P I love the dress you chose for me Jen! and you're wedding dress is gorgeous! ...

Jig, why is it that in everything you post I find something that could be construed as dirty? I can't figure out if the problem lies with your mind or ...

The ones I can remember... Fahrenheit 451 , Ray Bradbury Son of the Shadows , Juliet Marillier Persuasion , Jane Austen Animal Farm , George Orwell. I was surprised at ...

5/10: You lose points for the Serj Tenkian. Oddly enough I LOVE System of a Down, but I don't like any of Serj Tenkian's songs. Panic at the disco=win! Smells ...

Hello Lord Gluzman! We'll start with the bad, shall we? And then we'll go on to the good. :) First things first, your structure. This poem has no definite form, ...

Hey PG :) The first thing that I noticed about this is that your structure is very random. You change the position of your rhyming lines, and the lengths of ...