Adnamarine

For a first attempt at poetry, I expected worse. =) I have to be honest when I say, however, that it was slightly... boring. One of the most important things ...

Welcome to Yewis umutoni. =) Not sure exactly where to start. Frankly, this reads like prose. Now, what exactly is the difference between poetry and prose? Part of it has ...

HI! How's it going Grass? Interesting username choice. Any particular reason for it? :) I'm Adna, or Nam, whichever ya like. Rosey there gave you some good info, but I ...

#16 A flash of lace, brushing the air, Swirling, glancing, They ricochet off leather and secret skin, Swiftly kissing each other, Twirling away, Flirting, and teasing the orchestra; Tugging at ...

#15 He cracks her eyes, They’re brittle and broken Apart With thoughts of visions of— Not him. Imagine a bed heaped with cushions waiting In case you fall. You won’t. ...

Now that the instructors have a chatroom, what about the greeters?

Hiya!!!! This place IS huge, isn't it? It's so so great. I hope you're having fun already! D: It can get a little confusing at first, but that's what I'm ...

#14 Splinters like cigarette paper caught between as lead in stained glass, work apart, slowly slowly driving to alienate. Nails seperate the bones white and frail; wisdom's lungs collapse, dragging ...

Hi Bobbie! Nice to meet you xD Welcome aboard and all that jazz, etc. A couple quick rules. Please don't use chatspeak. You have a wonderful example of proper puncuation ...

Hey Erica. The biggest thing missing from this poem is any kind of imagery, and it misses that a lot . You use the idea of paths, but if you ...

name: Adna (or if you like I've got a half dozen or so more to pick from xD) age: 21 what you write: I write poetry, and the occasional VERY ...

Whoa, holy smilies batman. xD Nice to see some enthusiasm, Coco! But wow, go you! 16 review already! Love to see the new members get right into the swing of ...

Hi, Megan. To start with structure, you've got a good rhythm going. (Rhythm=the pattern of syllables resulting in a poem that flows smoothly) Something I always suggest regardless is that ...

I didn't really like 10, so thank you =)

#08: Chalky air clouds their lungs, drink clouds their thinking but on instinct they shuffle the cards Play the keys like a jazzy love affair to keep the atmosphere They ...