Adnamarine

Because a flame is more than heat, And wax is more than oil. Keeping alive is quite the feat, When surrounded by tur-moil. What because? What is the result of ...

"A bridge of colors hangs motionless in the sky." 'bridge of colors' isn't the most unique description of a rainbow. I'd go for something more subtle, even if it's just ...

This is a great beginning. I don’t have any plot or character faults to mention. I think the biggest problem is your tendency to make your prose very wordy, and ...

The first stanza of this poem was lovely. I have to admit, I'm afraid, that the rest of the poem became gradually more and more of a let down after ...

Hey Shina, I apologize for not actually reviewing this, but maybe it would fit better in the lyrics section then?

To start with, I do like the story in this poem, the meaning; it's unique, and true to life. But let's take a look at your means of expressing it; ...

I've always wanted to try pantoum. Even though changing some of the wording in the repeated lines doesn't technically follow the rules, poetry rules are made to be broken, right? ...

When I try to go to the page 101 Tips for Writers, the page that shows up says "Oops, that page doesn't exist!"

Why yes, yes I do; nothing interesting mind you, but... college is coming up, you know. TPBM loves Edgar Allen Poe

Sounds There is a hum of voices, Rising and falling, A cacophony, In tune and out weaving— A kitten purr, a hyena cackle, An opera soprano’s resonating… chirp: Purely instrumental, ...

Ally! I promise I will do this immediately when I get back from vacation! That's about a week from now, so I'm sorry. D: But I will get to this! ...

I got a surprise phonecall yesterday, at the perfect moment.

Done! Next?

Forgive the delay! I forgot I suggested my WRFF thread and was only looking out for a PM. :P And now forgive me if I can only point out some ...

Hihi! Welcome aboard, Standout. Any nickname you want to be called? I think the rules were pretty much covered for you, but here's a couple helpful links, just in case: ...