AdamBH

Another day has come Has gone. Has past Like a miscarriage. I end before I even have begun. I'm like a failed sperm, Still whizzing Like a spinning top Slowing ...

I agree with Warrior Princess, except that she thought of a lot more to say about it than I did! The only things I have to say is that the ...

I love the message of this poem but I agree with LastPaladin. I think you should completely rewrite this and add loads of figurative themes and stuff like that. Make ...

I thought it was lovely and very clever. Loved the extended metaphor. One suggestion is that the line 'like a picture in the sand' sounds a little akward for some ...

I like this one a lot. I don't have any direct criticism, only I would have liked to hear a bit more detail. Why are you falling for her? Etc. ...

Ugly Mirror, Pretty Mirror, Haunting my life; One an elixir, The other a knife. Ugly Mirror, Pretty mirror, My dear love and fear; Pity only one of you Can ever ...

People usually drink wine with meals, Rosé, white or red regardless, I take a swig of poison, but don't take salt, but arsanic. I love this bit, it's like harm ...

Loved it! I especially loved the end of the second to last stanza, it makes it so much sadder. I do think the rest of it is terribly much like ...

Thank you everyone for he reviews! So, this is my explanation about the background of the poem. It's about how there are so many females who hate men in this ...

Men. Men men men. What a filthy taste on your pristine lips. Your eyes look so cold, A warmth is hidden. But I see it when you talk to your ...

Thank youuuuuuu :D The last stanza, force me to eat your throbbing body is like rape me in a twisted canniballistic way, and lets digest each other forever is like ...

It's good. I think that having 'and more' at the end of each stanza is a little akward, although I can see why you have done it. I also think ...

This is very sweet, and smart too! I think it's amazing how you took such a cliché scenario and turned it into a very deep and meaningful monologue where we ...

I love it! The only thing I can say is that I'd love to know a bit more about the context of this; is it written from the perspective of ...

Paint your lips with a rich, coal black. Light the fire and let the blood flow. Cut my heart with your blunt love - We're not pretending this is right. ...