AdamBH

They think it's sexy, I agree, I guess. It's our nice game where you tie me to you and I will run away with you, to seek wood that can ...

I agree with Kimalane on the nit-picks. I think it's MUCH better now :D. However, I think there's a sort of message and it's repeated in different ways throughout the ...

I like your concept, but as I have said several times today already, use imagery and make it shorter. It seems like you are droning on a little too much ...

I don't understand what you mean to put as the message of this poem. I think it's interesting how you seem to blend in reality with fiction. Why are you ...

I love your poem, but i think you could definitely use some imagery to make it more emotional. Then we'll talk XD. But your technique is very good, in my ...

I think you need first of all to make the syllable count regular on each line - that would make it sound a million times better, and you can do ...

I don't really understand what the message of this poem is. You describe an earthquake quite at face value, and then the last line begins to be emotional, but the ...

Hi there :). Thank you for the review ^^. The 'alack' is actually there to fill the iambic pentameter and it sort of provides a jarring break between 'love' and ...

She slides along the spurting stream of life, She sticks out like a small, skewed, kissing-nose. She strikes me on the hands and smooth-skinned chest Where I have sinned - ...

You didn't show me his cuts on your back, But I saw them when I made love to you. You came to me, for me to drink your tears And ...

I like this poem very much! I thought that the repeated stanza was a little bit off-throwing, and so was the change of rhythm in the end. Overall, very nice, ...

Ooooh blueberry pieee :O (Just a quick reply to your message before I start, Tatiana is my favouritre character too along with Hanna. XD The Tatiana-Hanna subplot is also my ...

Love it! I love how it shows how opposites can attract. I think so many people don't get that. Wonderful job!

DID YOU ALL READ THE PROLOGUE FIRST?????? And also, sorry about the pragaraphing. I did paragraph it in my word document but it was only by indenting, so it didn't ...

CHAPTER 1 Rachel's father had been half Russian, half Japanese, and he died when she was four. He was hit by a car crossing the road, but Rachel likes to ...