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Okay I understand it a little better now that i've read through it again. :smt003

Thi story is a very well thought out and emotional. The amount tention could be felt in the words alone. The characters were represented well in you writing. Good job!

thank you! I didn't like the "world is evil" line either so I changed it. you coments were helpful, and again: thank you dasiamari!

It was a good start, and a cool concept, but I think you could of done something a little more interesting. Your story had amazing potential, but by the end ...

wow... that was beautiful. Your writing style flows nicly, and would speak to many young women after a harsh break-up, because it came from the heart of someone who Knows ...