Abyss

hmmm...I love how you personify tainted perfection in this piece, how an angel of glory can be subjected to desolate ruin. This stanza here sort of mystified the poem a ...

This story took me on a journey--a sweet journey--but then led me off a cliff and into an empty river teeming with potential. I feel as though your piece has ...

This poem somehow reminded me of that eccentric young blonde girl in Harry Potter, who speaks to dead people and all. Anyways, I actually read it in her exact voice ...

In a land, cursed, with deadened peril Asleep in scattered corpses, silent, In their tainted armor of iron and gold; Among boulders of pure stone—untouched-- Grew a tree. A tree ...

Mostly profound people never find themselves dwelling inbetween two consider yourself deep:) the poem for me was literally too sweet in trying to express such a 'bitter' logic. Try substituting ...

I'm drawn to love the diabolic elegance of this poem, it truly is gripping through its velvety smooth grasp. although im rather perplexed as to what role the girls had ...

I'm drawn to love the diabolic elegance of this poem, it truly is gripping through its velvety smooth grasp. although im rather perplexed as to what role the girls had ...

The basic concept was a tad cliche but, the way you brought it across wasn't, so I applaud you for that. If only the king had an opposition other than ...

I like how the first and last stanza links, its great how it opens and closes the poem. Although some parts were a little confusing, like, in one moment 'she' ...

“Their bread will be cut. Their wine will part.” He said, harshly pampered by perspirations pinnacle, bent at his knees, Tightly tied by forceful ropes roaring past the connective humming ...

Hey, I like how as I read your poem I got multiple flashbacks of abused women and outraged husbands, its almost as if the poem comes to life in a ...

hey there! I personally dont think you should change anything on this piece, its perfect the way it is and its yours. thats the beauty of art really, every motion ...

Haha yeah I get that from most people...but with me its all about the depth really although I have been trying to learn how to make my writing commercial it ...

Hey there. I really appreciate the symbolism here and the internal war involved. The concept is rather magnificent, as from its micro standing it paralells the worlds main problem--disagreement. This ...

She walked a path. Paved. With all that is luminary. Pushing her child. A path of broken stars and glowing debris of shattered ships, Adrift in a common motion and ...