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it was a god idea but really sketchy, i kinda got lost. try to use more details and word it differently. i would head back to the drawing board and ...

I really liked it, and ur right, it is really short. Try to avoid saying mate too many times, or using tongues too much. and there is usually only one ...

Hey thanks Geneeves!!! Lol i'm glad u liked it. Sorry about the words that say 't't after it, idk what happened. Lol if u were wondering, it will make sense ...

Ok just wanted to point out that there is already a book published By stephenie meyer called eclipse: lol it was ok its a lilshort to be a first chapter ...

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Absoulutely beautfuly writen. I'm not sure about spelling, but the way you worded it sounded great. It flowed beautfully!!! I'm jealous!! i wish tht i could write like you can!!! ...

LOL I thought tht was great!! u and my freind kirsten would rlly get along!! :smt026 :smt026 :smt026 :smt023

Ok i thought this was very good and enjoyable but it had alot of mistakes. :smt040 He needed to get to Qahz Palace before King Xano began to worry, and ...

LOL no prob!! any time! If you pm me the next time u post something that needs reveiwing ill be sure to!! :elephant: :smt068 :smt100 :smt072 :smt026

This was cool. I have a bad habbit of thinking and immagineing parts, like what would charlie think if he found out that edward was a vampire, and such. this ...

is the caracter a girl or a boy??? just a side note.

LOL this is confuseing, but COOL!! lol vampires must be a popular topic. im writeing a vampire story too. Yours really paintts a picture in your head.

I thought that that was cool. Try to keep it shorter, though. I really like it!!! keep it up! this is really good story material!

Hey!!! i REALLY like this. Don't give yourself a hard time, i liked it alot. so what? it took a year. Drapes of sheer darkness hung over the windows OK ...

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