Abocreature

This is good writing with only a few grammatical errors, but... I agree with Flyers. This chapter didn't hold my attention for more than a few paragraphs. It seemed like ...

Great job. You've gone back to gripping me like you did in the first chapter. Very few grammatical mistakes besides what was already said, and I can feel a lot ...

I'm sorry for starting this review off negatively, but this was a bit disappointing. Your first chapter was definitely more interesting, but this one seemed really... well, cliche. It didn't ...

This was very intriguing- in a good way. I found myself very into the characters, and got a real feel for Jack. That, however, leads to my first point. Not ...

The story almost instantly hooked me. The emotions, expressions, and explanations were all very realistic and gripping. It really made me wonder how these special powers of hers works, or ...

Hello again, Faia. For good points... Wow. Simply amazing. The story is developing very well. Questions were pouring from my brain throughout the reading. I could feel the fear, and ...

Hello, Faia. For positives... You know, from the initial description it sounded like a matrix-type story. However, after reading it (which I'm glad I did), it's a lot better than ...

This chapter was incredible! I love the emotion put out in this! It's amazing how well you can write! I wish I could write like you... I'm not a good ...

I like how you changed perspectives there! Great job! ^^ There are a couple errors I found, though, that I put in bold: Chapter two Jack drove a little crazier ...

He was the oldest in this family, the one who gave this family life. He was very handsome for his age (Comma, I think...) and I could see why Odette ...

This chapter was better, I'm starting to enjoy this story more and more. ^^ Thank you for PMing me, I really like reading this. ^^ I can't wait for the ...

Excellent chapter as always! ^^ This is all so exciting! I can't wait until the next chapter! Keep up the good work! ^^ As always, I love they way you ...

This was pretty good. A few shaky sentences here and there. I'm wondering what will happen next. Overall, it was more of a plot build chapter, which is what the ...

Great job! It's strange, though. It just felt like something was missing in this chapter. I just can't put my finger on it. It was a great chapter, nonetheless. It ...

Awesome chapter! I really liked it! I like how she seems to becoming more human around Isaac, and how she has no idea that she actually likes him and/or is ...