AVilicious666

hurt really bad, so I jumped into a keg of...

covered myself with a leaf, but that

and there's no blow dryers in heaven. I..

i still had the urge to pee, so i..

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Martians!

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To love your executioner, Saving him at that Best lines of the whole poem. Try and use less questions and more imagery and figurative language and poetic devices. You have ...

i really like this. my only couple of nitpicks is that you do more telling than showing. my favorite lines are your first. and your last two lines just need ...

The poem has a really nice start. You ended really well with lots of imagery and figurative language, but where did that come from? The beginning you do a lot ...

This poem kind of seems like you're almost talking to yourself, which could be a cool way to portray it, but you need to use some figurative language. I almost ...

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AVilicious666> Thanks for the long review and lesson about that commas. Won't use them like that ever again. Promise. You're welcome. ^.^