ATragicLoveStory

Alright. Here's the scoop. My first reactiton to your poem was probably not the response you want your reader to think. As I read farther in your poem, my first ...

A bit cliche of a topic, but I just let my thoughts flow and created this piece. I'll probably revisit and edit this piece over and over in order to ...

This poem has no title yet. If you have any suggestions on a suitable title, feel free to post. ----- A lonely lover Wanders away from the chaos And enters ...

Aww, thanks, Juan. I love you. :D Now time for the critique: Edited: When all hope is gone, I'll come! When your heart is in two, I'll come! When you ...

I wrote this piece as an assignment for my Creative Writing class. The topic was the high school commons [aka the cafeteria] Enjoy. ---------------------------------------------------- Burning fluores

In addition to what Razorblade_Saint said, I loved your little "story." Computers tend to freeze or completely "die" at the most inconvienient times. Nice job. It was well written. Stephanie

Wow, I really loved this piece. It had so much description and I think I understand why she killed herself and himself. It seemed as if you gave off the ...

My boyfriend made me listen to this song. I loved it. It's so much better in japanese and even better in spanish. It has great lyrics too. Stephanie

I really liked this chapter too, Tina. I enjoy this story so much. I like your style of writing in general. Once again, I found no punctuation or spelling errors. ...

I'm actually not sure what else to say. The other people who commented on your poem said most of it. I enjoyed it. It was short, sweet and to the ...

Alright. First off, this poem sort of confused me. Does the guy mean that she has a crush on HIM or another guy? Maybe I just misunderstood. Second off, I ...

Tina, This story made me laugh. I can totally picture myself doing the same thing as Autumn. There was no punctuation or spelling mistakes that I noticed, although I didn't ...

First off, punctuation and spelling: I stood beneath the shower head and let the hot water wash away the stresses of the past two hours, condensing it into a steam ...

What to say...Well, Rieda and kitty15 basically mentioned all the BAD points of your poem, so I'll point out the good points. I'll give you points for using emotion in ...

Juan, Aw. It seems as if you put your whole heart into it. It's so beautiful. Thanks! ^_^ This poem has so much imagery in it, it's amazing. Obviously, your ...