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I agree with the posts before mine: I have a feeling of "it can't end here" kinda thing. I really like this piece, you did a fantastic job on the ...

OK, I really don't have anything to say about the story, besides that I think it's kinda funny! :D I have some advice for you, and it will be hard ...

OK!!! :D I love doing reviews for this story line: - I totally love how you mixed in another character and explained that Logan wasn't in love with her at ...

Hello, :) I'll start out with the nit picks then we'll move on: - Minor spelling mistake in the fifth paragraph: I think you meant "couch" instead of coach. - ...

I could totally see this playing out in an actual book. Well written! Please go back through though, because there were minor word errors, and grammar errors. But I totally ...

If you would like, I will make a sequel to this short story. :) I left little details out for that reason. thanks for noticing! and thank you for the ...

I totally agree with every word of this: Writers would die to protect their children. I love how serious and intense this piece is, you really got the point and ...

*****Note: this is my first story in a long time. Please review and tell me what you think!!! I really want insight so i know how I'm doing!***** I sit ...

Hey, I really don't usually read this kind of thing, but you did really good. I like the part where you explain how 500 words is enough to make people ...

Hey! :D I just wanted to say that I know what that all feels like, so i really felt like this is a good piece. I like how you didn't ...

I really like this piece, it seems to have concept. The beginning really threw me out the window, because I didn't really understand it, but I think I had a ...

Worst written story???!!??!?!??!!! I BEG TO DIFFER!! This was wonderfully written and really had true meaning to it: the grammar shouldn't matter to a true writer: just to object of ...

AAH! I swear if you don't kill Asher i will! You have some serious skills on you, chick! Yet again: don't leave me hanging! I do think that you could ...

depressed your character was. but i have to ask: is this character you? like you specifically? Be careful on how much you put out there of yourself as people tend ...

Cute. I think a name for your character was missing, but I like the mystery in the stranger and the dance that made me want to keep reading. Explain more ...