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I really like this piece. I think you got the whole moral concept of love and affection across to your readers. I found nothing wrong with this piece, and I ...

I have to say, this had me near tears. It hit really close to home, and I like that about your writing. I found no faults in this piece or ...

Hey there! :) OK, so in the first paragraph, you spelled "pupet" when it should be spelled "puppet". And there were a few minor spelling mistakes here and there too, ...

Bravo. :) This is a very intricate, kind of multiple personality read. And I loved how you compared the dance to the painting process and the actions and thought of ...

This was a dark piece. I'm just saying this, I'm a Christian and all, and even at 14, I do question the things Stephanie was writing on her letter. I ...

A round of applause for the A* Cheater! I totally love this. From the way you described things it made it come to life, and really touched me. There were ...

So totally true. I love how you worded it very delicately in the beginning but in the end you were just blunt about it; how you did it really worked. ...

Hello, :) I agree with Jennya, it really tripped me up on how to read it with how you worded it. All together though, you wrote this piece out nicely. ...

I like how you put feeling into this; when I read this it felt like there was something behind the words. to me it kind of seemed like you (or ...

Bravo. Truly, you are in the process of writing something that is worth every moment of reading. There were a few minor grammar errors, and the graphics were a bit ...

The last two reviews you guys posted I know there are things in there that are very questionable: why didn't she call an ambulance? and smaller details that I left ...

YAY!!! Total round of applause! I'm loving the twists you put in this story! To think a few months ago it was just a short story!!! I HATE where you ...

Yeah, I see what you're saying. But people can die from beatings. I willl go back though, and make it more gruesome though! thanks for the review Luxy! ---Ash. P.S. ...

I'm actually going to contribute this time! Woo Hoo! :) can't wait

Wow. I'm really struggling to get words to describe this: You did a really good job on making the title have meaning, but I think you should develop the story ...