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Hello there :) I'll start with some nitpicks. I write this letter, knowing that when you read it, I will be dead. I always knew I had a limited time ...

Hello there. :) I don't have any nitpicks for you so I'm just going to jump right to the get-go. I loved this piece. It was interesting because, even though ...

Hello there :) I can really see alot of great moments in this piece. And you're rhyme scheme is interesting, because i haven't ever seen anyone write with one like ...

Hello there :) I'll start out with the nitpicks There was a thought swarming around my mind. My imagination was paying off. The thought was perhaps giving me a weird ...

Amazing. Amazing. Amazing. Hello there :) I don't have any nit picks for this piece so I'll go right to my impression: Astounding. Truly, you have a gift for this. ...

Hey! Re-read the edited version: great! You fixed those spots where things didn't quite make sense, and the spelling errors. :) You also put a little more into the story, ...

Hey, there! :) Welcome to the site! Tip: Chat is a great way to see who writes what. Sometimes, people drop intentional hints on what they write and want reviews ...

Hello there :) Good story. I enjoyed it. It sounds well thought out, and there seems like there's a good plot to it. Go back through, though, and notice that ...

Hello there :) I'm going to start out with nitpicks, and I'm not trying to be mean i swear. I liked your story, but it was kind of hard to ...

I don't know what to say. In a way, this whole thing is very real; the fact that people lose themselves to something whether it be drugs, hatred, lust, and ...

This piece was interesting. I thought it was cool/sad that he had to die to realize the beauty of simple things in life, yet even after he died, he finally ...

Haha. ok. I'm very confused on what exactly happened and why he was going on a date with a fire hydrant BUT this piece was pretty good. Good descriptive details ...

Amazing, amazing, amazing! it's very very clear of the setting, but I don't think you're settling on the main idea of the bride being jittery. it seems like you're settling ...

:) No! You weren't too harsh at all, looking back, I totally understand the mistakes you're pointing out. Thank you for the "harsh" criticism :) After a few more reviews, ...

Amazing. The mood of the story was sad, dark and compelling. It was well written, and emotional. The more I think of it, the more it seems to be realistic, ...