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Re: Dear Sergio.
I guess I'll just write what I feel. Dear Sergio, The past few years haven't been easy between us, I know that. I also know that I've made things complicated. ...
Jul 13, 2011 -
Re: On the Edge.
There are a lot of things that teenagers go through; whether it be on a daily basis, or something just seems to magically pop up in our lives. Sometimes, fate ...
Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: The Midnight Wolf
Hey DramaLlama! :) Good voice here! You might want to think of a rhyme scheme, though. Doing this is going to help set up a pattern in the readers mind ...
Jul 5, 2011 -
Re: You Found Me
Hey Sol. This piece was everything and more amazing. I'm a christian too, and i've only had one instance like this that can even compare to that. When I read ...
Jul 4, 2011 -
Re: No More Judging
hello there :) you had a lot of great parts in here and this one has to be my favorite: I want to breathe fresh air, Step on ground that ...
Jul 4, 2011 -
Re: Six Word Stories
Hello :) this was all interesting. I have never seen six word stories, so this was an interesting read for me. Its cool because you just let the unsaid words ...
Jul 2, 2011 -
Re: Lovers. Fighters. Friends.
OK, guys :) thanks for great reviews. I will change places where it doesnt make sense word wise soon, BUT i will not change the age. This is an actual ...
Jul 2, 2011 -
Re: A Chance At Good-Bye (Part 1)
Hello there! :) Great read so far. Nit pick time ! When someone dies , they check in on my list. At the end of the week Hermes , has ...
Jul 2, 2011 -
Re: Fear-Scent
Hello there :) great read. You let the emotions kick in by themselves. You used fragments alot and that kind of bugged me, but the way in which you used ...
Jul 2, 2011 -
Re: Could I Ask You For A Favor
Great read. :) You made it very fluent and very touching. This is the kind of thing that happens to only a few people; that life changing perspective. This is ...
Jul 1, 2011 -
Re: The Demon Within
Hello there! great piece! :) You fluency was great but in some places a little jumbled up; only a little. You had a great, strong voice in this, and i ...
Jul 1, 2011 -
Re: Perfect Day
Hello there. I'm going to assume the m.c. is a girl? I didn't find any parts where there could be nitpicks. :) You should probably give the main character a ...
Jun 29, 2011 -
Re: Hello Everybody :)
Welcome to YWS! This place is a ton of fun, and there is always lots to do! There is plenty to review and I'll be glad to review some of ...
Jun 29, 2011 -
Re: Forever Together
Hello there :) This was really a cute story. Sad, though, but adorable. I love how you made the guy her key to moving on; there's true love! I do ...
Jun 29, 2011 -
Re: The Countdown
Hello there :) I've got to say, in 100 words, this made an impact. I've been there, done that, and this made me think of that one time. When you ...
Jun 29, 2011