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Hello there! Once again another great piece to the puzzle. You are fitting together the intertwining perspectives very nicely, and you have a great flow. I do suggest not jumping ...

Dear Diary, 2011 You would think that sitting alone and staring out at a dark, cloudy night would be boring to a teenager. You would think that a girl who ...

Hello there :) Cute, and short story. I really liked it. Here are some suggestions : I was ten years old when I found out who I really was. My ...

Great job, to start off with. I don't think even a dictionary can describe love, although it is there in words. Maybe no one really knows what love is, but ...

Great job, to start off with. I don't think even a dictionary can describe love, although it is there in words. Maybe no one really knows what love is, but ...

Hello ! I thought this was short, sweet and right to the point really :) I thought all of the lines made it harder to read when they were spaced ...

Alright, Deary! You know me,k and I'm so sorry for delaying this review. I've gotta give you this, the story line seems very, very thought out, and could go alot ...

Wow. This was really confusing, but once I re-read it.... wow. I think you used words, and told but didn't show. I could see a girl who had been hurt, ...

Hello there!! :) First off, I'll do my nitpicks, then tell you what I think overall. I do not regret answering that phone call. But at the time it felt ...

Hello there!! :) First off, I'll do my nitpicks, then tell you what I think overall. I do not regret answering that phone call. But at the time it felt ...

hello there :) Just one more sip , I promised myself as the fiery , burgundy liquid swam down my throat. Okay, well , one more should really do it. ...

Hello there :) I'll get through the nitpicks, then go onto a general impression for you. :) My dearest Will, Do you remember when we first met? I was seventeen ...

I haven't written anything worth while in a long time. Comments, and criticism are accepted! :) I told myself that this was all some kind of sick, twisted game. I ...

Hey There :) I really loved this poem of yours really gives a person alot to think about. Like what kind of center of life we have or the paths ...

hey there :) great beginning. You set up a great mood, kind of dreary, and you know something's up right away by the second group of lines. You need to ...