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  • Hello there! Once again another great piece to the puzzle. You are fitting together the intertwining perspectives very nicely, and you have a great flow. I do suggest not jumping ...

    Dec 16, 2011

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: Kisses of the Night

    Dear Diary, 2011 You would think that sitting alone and staring out at a dark, cloudy night would be boring to a teenager. You would think that a girl who ...

    Nov 5, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: Nobody else

    Hello there :) Cute, and short story. I really liked it. Here are some suggestions : I was ten years old when I found out who I really was. My ...

    Nov 4, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: Cuts.

    Great job, to start off with. I don't think even a dictionary can describe love, although it is there in words. Maybe no one really knows what love is, but ...

    Nov 4, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: Cuts.

    Great job, to start off with. I don't think even a dictionary can describe love, although it is there in words. Maybe no one really knows what love is, but ...

    Nov 4, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: I Hate Him.

    Hello ! I thought this was short, sweet and right to the point really :) I thought all of the lines made it harder to read when they were spaced ...

    Nov 4, 2011


  • Alright, Deary! You know me,k and I'm so sorry for delaying this review. I've gotta give you this, the story line seems very, very thought out, and could go alot ...

    Nov 4, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: The Swan

    Wow. This was really confusing, but once I re-read it.... wow. I think you used words, and told but didn't show. I could see a girl who had been hurt, ...

    Sep 11, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: We Lie in Ruin

    Hello there!! :) First off, I'll do my nitpicks, then tell you what I think overall. I do not regret answering that phone call. But at the time it felt ...

    Sep 11, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: We Lie in Ruin

    Hello there!! :) First off, I'll do my nitpicks, then tell you what I think overall. I do not regret answering that phone call. But at the time it felt ...

    Sep 11, 2011

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: Addiction

    hello there :) Just one more sip , I promised myself as the fiery , burgundy liquid swam down my throat. Okay, well , one more should really do it. ...

    Aug 29, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: I will always love you.

    Hello there :) I'll get through the nitpicks, then go onto a general impression for you. :) My dearest Will, Do you remember when we first met? I was seventeen ...

    Aug 29, 2011

  • General Fiction Short Stories
    Re: Hold your breath.

    I haven't written anything worth while in a long time. Comments, and criticism are accepted! :) I told myself that this was all some kind of sick, twisted game. I ...

    Jul 23, 2011


  • Hey There :) I really loved this poem of yours really gives a person alot to think about. Like what kind of center of life we have or the paths ...

    Jul 23, 2011

  • Romantic Short Stories
    Re: Across The Ocean

    hey there :) great beginning. You set up a great mood, kind of dreary, and you know something's up right away by the second group of lines. You need to ...

    Jul 21, 2011


fun fact i hear my evil twin once wrote a story about a hacker who used the name fyshi33k bc there are 33k-ish species of fish and she liked phishing so fyshi-33k made sense but then she got super embarrassed when someone forced her to explain
— VyperShadow