ADream

This is really nice. I loved it from beginning to the end. It's the kind of imaginary feel that I really like, something magical in everyday life. "The candle is ...

Hello! :) The poem is beautiful. I love the beginning. Although the ending is really cheesy, (don't mind it. I've written cheesier stories) the poem is sweet. You wouldn't have ...

I think you'll be just fine. I'm having similar troubles myself, but I don't mind. As long as I keep posting, there's bound to be someone who will read it. ...

Welcome all new members! (I'm actually quite new myself, but I feel that I can already have privileges to welcome newbies.) :D Welcome and we hope you like it here. ...

I love your descriptive style! The poem is unique and lovely all together. It's beautiful. Keep it up.

Awww, this poem is awfully sweet. I love poems like these. Sweet and simple. The vocabulary is easy to understand, which is alright, but changing the words a bit can ...

I really liked this poem. I'm glad you changed the last lines. That was my favorite. Overall, your writing has potential. Be sure to write more lovely poems as this.

I really like this poem, though I agree with the others. The sentence structure is a bit strange. But I know how hard it is to write a rhyming poem. ...

When we return home, I avoid Richard and busy myself preparing dinner. I hear the sound of tins dropping and rolling on the floor. I turn around and see Richard ...

Actually, I intended for it to be "the person" because I didn't want to disclose the gender. Feeling her heartbeat is something of her habit, there is a story behind ...

Thank you for your criticism. I have tweaked it a bit after you pointed it out. The spacing was totally surprising, since I copied it from Microsoft Word, I thought ...

Hello. I love this story. I'm kind of saddened that she killed herself (or maybe not, it just says everything went black). But it is really good. I love her ...

So far, this is very interesting. I'll be reading more of this as soon as I can. Keep up the good work.

Very creative. I love the first stanza the most. If I were a pessimist, I would agree with your views on the poem. But this is good reading fun.

Hi, I like the story so far. I know that this is set in 1700s but somehow, when I read it, it doesn't sound like something out of 1700s. Maybe ...