4evadreamin

Yeah. I know... My grammar's crap, I've never had a chance to edit though. It's like eleven o' clock at night so I can't do it now. I do that ...

That really helped, a lot. I had no idea about the punctuation in dialogue was supposed to be like that... All the adults on who've reviewed this and they've never ...

I think it's worth going on, definately. The description in this is excelent, but you have to make it a little clearer as to what is exactly happening. It's something ...

These were great. Yeah, they were dead funny... I like the second one the best, great job. You should definately post some of your fantasy stories, I'm sure they're brilliant, ...

Hey, this made me laugh, it was cool. It didn't make any sense but it was still really cool... Liked how you used all the different beams, tell your friends ...

Yep I've posted loads, I'm so stupid though I didn't read the rules, I should have done one a day but instead I stuck them all on at the same ...

Thanks for all the welcomes!! I'm loving it on here at the moment. Thanks!!!! :D

When I said you I sort of meant all of you... As in Americans... When I was there everyone was drinking tea with ice in it. I think you can ...

I do think you lot should have independance, I never said you shouldn't. I think Australia should too, alot of people believe that, they still have our Queen... But no, ...

You have sparked a massive debate in my house now... Just so you know, my mam reckons you're right to have your independence and my step dad thinks you should ...

Yes I love tea, I'm drinking a cup now, quite strong with three sugars... mmm. No, I don't think it was greed, I can just see the reasons why we ...

I really like the new ending, much more dramatic. It's completely changed though, I'm guessing all isn't lost anymore. Does that not completely change the story? Oh well, it's you ...

The revolutionary war... Nope, we haven't done that yet, in History we learn about Henry the eighth and world wars and stuff like that, we'll probably do it sometime soon ...

Wow, thanks for two really in depth reviews, great suggestons. This is a part of a much longer story, the whole point of it is to introduce the two characters. ...

Thanks, I didn't mention that I wrote this when I was eleven, it's not the best poem I've ever written, I just found it in an old notebook... Glad you ...