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Mean Mr. Mustard, Maybe I appreciate excellent poetry more than I can appreciate excellent prose because I'm not good at writing poetry. Maybe it's that you can convey much more ...

I think you should definately make this longer. I'm not sure, were you going for something short like this, are you just pouring out whatever you're thinking right now, or ...

Done!

Muffin, This was...really deep. I rarely ever read anything on YWS that's so thought out on this sort of morbid, if you will, level. I like how you structured each ...

And...another bump.

Something like this is really art. I really love its simplicity and strong message regardless. There's really not much else I can say, but it's a great thing when a ...

Much better. Now it seems like you're writing about something you've been holding back for a while, and now you want to let it out. I like it. I have ...

Hey Megan, I liked your basic premise for this poem, but I'm not sure if you meant for this to be about something very specific or something rather general. Your ...

MamaLama, I really, really, loved this! Your beautiful timing really made this s work of art, even though in the beginning of the story I had trouble figuring out which ...

JoJo, I really, really, really, really loved this poem. It was hysterical (and yes, I clicked 'like')! However, I agree with RangerHawk that the lotion couplet should definately go, because ...

The strides he took from the stairwell were subconsciously quick and silent, weighing down with each pace the faded boards, stiff and decrepit underneath his soles. Still, the flickering chandelier ...

First of all, welcome to YWS, Crookedteeth! If you need any help at all with the site, please don't hesitate to ask myself or any of the hundreds of great ...

Hey everyone! I'm back after a few months, and if you posted here and I didn't get back to you, please post again just so I know you're still interested ...

Sorry it took so long for me to get back to you, but here I am. I really thought this poem was magnificent, mainly because it was so layered and ...

Hey Snoink, Here is your requested review, belated three months I'm afraid, sorry about that. I've returned to YWS after some time after somewhat of a hiatus from writing. Anyway, ...