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Hey, ashley! Gosh, I'm so excited about this. Every time you edit the story gets better and better and my fingernails get shorter and shorter (that's a compliment). I hope ...

Yay! This is great. Now you are ready to move on, and I congratulate you for taking my criticism and suggestions so well. Most people just ignore them. (probably because ...

Wow! Your editing did a lot! This was a big improvement! Angel's and mine reviews certainly helped. I think you've done a great job revamping this. *drum roll* But, now ...

Hey, welcome to YWS! I'm Sunny, and I have just a few things here . . . I had never felt them before. Never had I ever felt something so ...

BELLA: OH MY GOSH, I LOVE EDWARD CULLEN HEART HEART LOVE LOVE ALL MY SOUL HEART LOVE EDWARD CULLEN. :lol: Doesn't get much better than this.

Really short. Doesn't mean it's bad (it isn't) but you can add so much more. :)

I love the plotting and scheming. I love to decide when to put in the action, when to put in the romance, and when to put the character(s) in the ...

Hey, niccy! An abnormally tall, lanky man with sun-bleached hair in a tweed jacket and black trousers entered first. :shock: Wow. This was quite a mouthful. *imagine me sitting in ...

Hello there again! I'm back to do the last half of chapter one. I'll try not to make it as long as the last one. :lol: “But why is that, ...

Sorry to break up this little conversation between Adrian and Zalarus (there are these things called PMs, Private Messages *hint*), but I'd like to say this: it's a good piece ...

Wow! That was great! Just a few things, though. (Sorry, I haven't mastered the art of downloading a document onto YWS yet. :lol:) My insides twist when I see him ...

I need to be me . Don't we all? I just love this part; we understand this, those of us who struggle to escape the pressure to be like everyone ...

:| First of all, the whole posting the entire song lyrics at the beginning was a real turn-off. Maybe put bits and pieces in the body of the story, instead ...

:shock: Intimidating paragraphs. Could hardly get pasted the first two. Sorry, but the format made my eyes cross, so I would tell you to change that first thing. Be back ...

Hey there! Just a few things . . . I thought to myself “Don’t worry, he’s a big guy. He’s fine. He’s probably at the bus right now saving me ...