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:shock: If you cut this into, say, three posts, and make the huge paragraphs smaller, I will come back and do a review. But my head just exploded. ~Sunny :smt107

I do hope though that something important happens on this walk. Though I'm assuming something will. :oops: Oh, gosh! Am I really that bad at pacing? I guess you could ...

Hey, Ash! I am so excited for this (no joke). Bold is my corrections, italics will be references, and [s]strikethrough[/s] is what it is. :P Smashed [s]against[/s] between the car ...

Hey, Ninja! Can't wait to read this. Just give me a moment to come up with a proper review . . . You don't care who is watching you as ...

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Yeah, I have to say I lost interest in this after the first few paragraphs. There's no point , no mystery or romance. Just a conversation between two friends. This ...

Wow. Good work. I think Sonlen got all of the nit-picking done, and I think it'll be great when it's edited. ~Sunny

Hey, Ninja! I'm back again. I noticed you haven't received any other critiques other than mine. I'm thinking you ought to change the title. "Depression" has little feeling and it's ...

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Hey, smileforever! This is great; I hope I can help with it. I clutched onto my stomach as I lay on my bed. * An error in the first sentence. ...

Sometimes I feel hopeless, unwanted, alone. Sometimes I feel like I could jump off a cliff and no one would really care. Sometimes Tylenol looks like a way out of ...

Lady Amelia slightly turned her head to the left as she raised her hand to her companion's forearm. “Emma, dear , a re you quite all right?” [s]Except[/s] Emma didn't ...

Hey, Icefire! I hope I can help with this. :) By the way, what's with the title? "Together Fornever?" Is it supposed to be "Together Forever" or "Together For Never"? ...

Ahhhh . . . Joseph's already done the nitpicking, so I'll just say that this is great. I know writers hate to hear that (I do anyway) but this really ...