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If I elaborated on the story, you wouldn't get the same feel. The problem with being a peer editor/reviewer of poetry and other works which try to convey emotion is ...

Link once again killed Sonic. "Hey guys what's up heha!" Sonic reappeared. Instantly he exploded again. "LINK HOW COULD YOU!" Cried Mario. "THIS MADNESS ENDS NOW" Yelled Link. "What are ...

"It's inspirational," said Mario. "It makes me want to go get all seven chaos emeralds for the hundreth time!" Said Sonic, who had just ran in. "NO NO NO NO ...

It was five years ago since that day... "Wait why are we suddenly in this field together standing over Jacob's grave!?" Asked Edward, surprised. "The narrator said it, so it ...

"WHOOOO DARES DISTURB MY SLUMBER!?" Howled Zant. "We do," cried the team. "HOW DARE YOU DISTURB MY BEAUTY SLEEP, LOOK AT MY FACE, UNDOUBTEDLY YOU FEEL SORRY FOR THE WRATH ...

"Where are we?" Asked Edward The gang looked around the empty white room Emett replied, "This must be what writers block is." Mario responded, "What's writers block? Do mushrooms come ...

I didn't really make a point clear enough that they're ghosts.

A man stands in a house of mirrors, which one is the real man with the gun? He tries to escape, the man with the gun follows him through his ...

Five bikers side by side, Ride out into the night. Engines revving helmets off, Ready for a bloody fight. Into the city the cycles ride, Not one wavers even a ...

Alright I don't care how Matt Daemon spelled his name, or whoever came up with that word... It sounds like it should be spelled demon, go read a bible... an ...

AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA MY GIRLFRIEND WOULD HATE THIS That was so clever you guys, lmfao

I should have used the word false.. I meant to just describe how nature's path is... well it's natural... And society, it's kinda manmade

Wow. I wonder what what the note said? Was it a suicide note? Was it a love note? You're killing me here! I think it was a love note

Thanks for the positive feedback

Hi there! Well, like you said, this could use some critique, but the point of a critique isn't to make your story better. The point of a critique is to ...