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I'm assuming that you meant to give more information to the reader later, but sometimes that isn't what the reader wants. I know that as a writer it is wonderful ...

My only real pointer is that from the detailed description I assumed that people were being hit my lightening and killed, and having their skull smashed in by the rain. ...

I had recently written my first book and wanted to share bits of it, so i typed in young writers society, those were the exact words, into google. The rest ...

I don't want ot be too much of a critic so i'll keep this short. I liked the story and the charecters a lot, and it wasn't too rushed. However, ...

Prologue When the child was born, it already knew how to use its powers. It had been born into an average middle class family who were wonderfully content with life. ...

I loved the descriptions of each charector as you have managed to get into each of them in detail, but not so much that it is boring, keep on writing, ...

Ciqton Chapter 1 Rictus Ulban Jeeroy’s face was a picture of utmost horror and pain. In the long line of people behind him, all of which he was shackled too, ...

"She always checked, that why." It should say: "She always checked, that's why." Love the main charectors name, very original.

I was a gripping introduction in my opinion, an it would compell me to read on, though i am worried, as it is easy to become lost in the sombre ...

There were quite a few spelling mistakes in there, but i am not too bothered about those, as they have already been pointed out. It was fun to read and ...

ok, i'll go do my reveiws now before i get into trouble. Thanks for the praise!

Wow, thank you so much for the glowing praise. So far the only reveiws i have had are from family so i am glad to hear an outsiders opinion, really ...

Prologue She felt her self coming back. She was finally stirred from her great slumber as the first atom of her being was put into place. She could feel life ...