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Haha, yes Vuzzycat, I wrote it myself.

Okay, so if you havn't read Sunrise in the Power of Three series by Erin Hunter, I suggest not reading this because it gives away big secrets revealed at the ...

I loved your review, very helpful indeed. Some parts of it I didn't quite understand where you were coming from, but hey, that's just me. I went back and added ...

Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it.

Aw that as so sad! Unfortunately, this story is true for so many Americans. It was very well written and the description really helped me visualize the setting. I saw ...

Amen. It's all so true. Not bad for your first religious poem. I would have loved to see a little rhyme in it, but hey, that's just my personal opinion ...

Absolutely beautiful. I'm lost for words to descibe this poem. I also think its great that, as a guy, you write poems because most guys don't, or they feel ashamed ...

This poem is beautiful, in a sad way of course. You could never tell it wasn't your usual style because the poem flowed so nicely. You should write more like ...

This poem hits home, you did an excellent job on it. I saw nothing that needs changing, it's perfect. I guess I can say that you and I are a ...

I absolutely loved this poem! The last two lines were a bit if-y because they didn't seem to flow into each other like the previous lines, but other than that ...

This story was pretty funny. Short yes, but I don't see any reason to lengthen it. I like how it really doesn't have a point to it, which that makes ...

I know this is a common thing for Warriors fans to write about, so there has to be at least one other fan-fiction of this on YWS. Rest assured, if ...

I think you have a great concept of the story line here, but there are a few things I suggest changing. You need to be more specific with the dialouge ...

The first thing I noticed is that there are no paragraphs. Whenever a new character starts speaking, that is a whole paragraph to itself. There are also a lot of ...

Hey, Stori! I'm a big fan of Warriors, just so you know, but that's not important right now :) I deffintely think you need to make the story longer, and ...