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Yeah I think it would be a fantastic idea. I was going to use it for one of my stories until I decided it would be a two part which ...

It was alright. I liked it and it flowed well and you had good discription and stuff. It wasn't really anything partiulary special though. Keep working at it though and ...

I liked this I thought it was pretty good. It was a great idea although the whole Lost Highway thing made no sense to me. This poem flowed well although ...

Alright I really like the scheme/layout for this poem and how it followed through the whole poem. It was nice and simple but it worked well. Two things I would ...

Alright. I am going to change those few grammatical/spealling mistakes. And yeah I agree with the end. I was already going way over my amount of words and I basically ...

Somebody please crit this? :(

Wow this is brillaint. You have used powerful words. It is fantastic. I like the tounge twister of syllables. I wouldn't have noticed it if Firestarter hadn't mentioned it. I ...

Yeah I agree this poem has been written a million times before, however I am sure this is where a million other poets start out and there is quite clearly ...

I don't know it was incredibly strange. It reminded me of poetry with a completely off, in some parts rhythm and that wasn't in a good way. I think you ...

Alright this is a really useful list. Thanks for that (:

"He pulled her closer, her skin warm against his rough hands. He leant into kiss and felt like all his troubles drizzled away. He was over the moon and he ...

Ah Linkin Park and Good Charlotte. Sweet x] Well I welcome you to YWS. I am looking forward to seeing some of your work (: ~Ferris AKA Tara~

Woah. I read anything this good on this site in my short time of being here. I loved the long lines, but short stanzas. This poem flowed really well. You ...

Both stanzas on there own were very good but they just didn't seem to fit together as a poem. I think you need to make them flow together a bit ...

I liked the flow and rhythm of the poem. However it was jut in many ways a bit of a teen angst poem. It is possible to write depressing poetry ...