-KayJuran-

thats very lovely, SL. :) Ich hasse Milch! mmmm... aber Kuche sind lecker!

yeah it is pretty cliche lol. i can get away with that more when its not in english sometimes! ;) we were doing 'aber' and 'sondern' today in grammar and ...

well the grammar needs a lot of work but with the correct changes, i think this could be very good if this is put right. umm lets see... You shield ...

i like the overall idea of this poem a lot. however, there are a few points i feel i have to raise here: first of all, i don't really get ...

woah! :o smaur definately deserves it!! :)

ok this is a traditional haiku; first line has 5 syllables then 7, then 5. i may add more to it but i havent decided whether or not to yet... ...

wow the shameless bump worked. this is great, though i much prefer the second one. here are my favourite bits: Stay friends? I wouldn’t mind. and as so many people ...

well this is def a haiku and i like the imagery a lot but i prefer it when the sentences don't go over more than one line - that's just ...

if the rest of your stuff is half this good, im def going to have to check it out! this is great, i really can't find fault with any of ...

don't really like the title so much myself. the actual poem however is much better! :) before i say anything, i'd like to ask: what do these words mean; 'accrued' ...

i don't do music genres very well but this sounds sorta emo. is it meant to be like that or is it just me? i like how all the verses ...

this is great. i find it quite hard to crit lyrics though when you can't hear the music, but i get the general idea. this is my favourite part: Tell ...

aaaaagggggghhhhhhh!!! you killed me!? oh no! oh no! aaagghhhh! ummm this was interesting, im just hoping you werent talking about me... i like the bit about the goose and the ...

*hugs!* :) well done both of you! keep up the good work :P

i like the shading on the hair a lot! :)