-KayJuran-

It's as if shes known me forever ^ should be she's i.e. with an apostrophe. I'd never of forgotton that smile on her face ^ should be 'have' and not ...

you're prophecy ^ correct me if i'm wrong but i have a feeling you meant to put 'your' and not 'you're'. you need to get this right or it'll end ...

i can't see anything...

few points on grammar: he must of just not seen it. ^ he must have just not seen it. what's a kid doing laying in the grass by himself?" ^ ...

hey! welcome to YWS! i hope you have fun here and make loadsa new friends! and ummm.. where is Guam..? :) ~KayJuran~

Him and Tim had been been practicing for 3 hours now i think it's supposed to be 'he and Tim'. might be wrong though... hmm. i like the story so ...

tbr: im pretty sure a coronet is like a crown but just a circular band of silver or gold. thanks to you both for the comments

Stars hang in the sky, Like pearls on a drop-necklace; A coronet moon.

This was a pretty good poem. Make sure you capitalize your I's, though. You also need an apostraphe in "sorrow's" in the last line, since you are using it in ...

quite a few English mistakes but that can be easily put right... The body of a dead Dark Elf layed behind him, ^ i think this should be "lay behind ...

"On Earth you must be covered, for it is not proper to be seen in you natural form in thier society." the ball replied. *your instead of you *their instead ...

I'm just bumping this thread cause this is possibly one of my favourite things I've written, so please leave your comments. Thanks very much! :P ~KayJuran~

i think it's a great idea; as firestarter also said, it's quite noticable when you look in the most recent topics section. and this is a writing site - if ...

Hey, feel free to pm me if you want any advice or whatever. I'd also advise critiquiquing, joining usergroups etc if you want to get noticed and make friends here. ...

unfortunately not. it'd be very cool to be an elephant and pick things up with my trunk. plus elephants never forget! so i'd do really well in all my exams ...