-KayJuran-

yep it's definately better this way - i like the earning / losing points for different boards idea.

sorry i wasn't paying much attention to looking for things i can crit 'cause i was too busy trying to find out what was about to happen next.. He had ...

pens are annoying - somehow i always end up with ink all over my hands after school... :S

It's just that I don't know how to solve them. I see like all the Mg's and get that but i don't see how to figure out how to solve ...

oh i definately like that last pic. very cute! :) :P :)

i like britrock and indie the best, but then i also listen to christian rock like Delirious? and world music like Alizee, Nena, and Sasuke.

i'm glad i can type fairly well 'cause i almost NEVER write stuff up using a pen except for editing notes and when i don't have my laptop with me. ...

i noticed you've got more spacing between each paragraph with this one. great thing to do 'cause it makes it easier to read. stringy brown hair ^ i'd probably say ...

The only other thing I feel that needs to be critiqued is when the other girl comes in and says “what would you know of it!…you’ve lived here for quite ...

yep, that first one is VERY funny. :)

hmm.. i see what you're saying here. i once said i was 'English' for nationality, and my friend said something along the lines of "no, you're not - you're British" ...

thanks. i can see i need to work on some things. i'll definately bear all of that in mind when i get to editing - i have to actually finish ...

looks good - makes it easier to find things. :)

Chapter I The burning oil lamps gave off a faint smell of jasmine that hung like a fog in the air. The room was plainly furnished; although the rug on ...

i have a (slightly off-topic, and i apologise inadvance...) question: who is Pat Buchanan?! he/she is on pretty much every poll and i never know who he/she is... yeah, so ...