-KayJuran-

Thanks for the comments everyone. Grif, you're right - everything is definately happening too fast at the moment. I was sorta surprised no-one else had mentioned that yet. Probably should ...

Yep!! The 'I've-never-heard-of-any-of-these-weird-random-bands-club!' :P :wink: Hehe, unless you can think of any other names..?

Any suggestions? Need to find some other way of saying it that makes sense... Hmm...

Thanks for the comments, CL and Fire. I agree with the consistency thing so I'll definately have to work on Samal, and work out what he'd say in these situations...

Thanks for the critiques adam, CL and Fire :P um.. quote from Wiktionary: Intransitive verb to start (started, starting) To begin an activity. (The rain started at 9:00.) To jerk ...

Well, this has gotta be good or I wouldn't have been able to read through all of those chapters in one sitting! :P Post more!!! And I'll look for things ...

EL: lol I haven't got changed from night clothes yet either. Only got up an hour ago... :roll: So... at the moment... - Grey nightie with a pink sheep on ...

Am I the only one who hasn't heard of them...? :?

Pretty much what everyone else has said. - Paragraphs after speech, and between different people speaking. - Some grammar and spelling needs checking. - More description, something that tells us ...

When you say tenses do you mean the sort of thing a linguist would automatically think of after hearing the word, such as past, present, future etc, or do you ...

I'm going to go and click right now!! :) :P :)

Woah! Hehe, I can hear the tune too! :P SO great that you can make a song about something like a calculator actually work . I don't know much about ...

Well, looking at Windows Media Player, I can see that I've only got one punk albut but it does rock! Try 'die Toten Hosen'!! :P

Watching back at me ^ I'm not entirely sure this part makes sense... Also, I think in the second verse, you need to put 'me' in the sentence, just as ...

There's something else I've noticed as well. The color was back in her cheeks ^ Here you've used the american spelling, while nearer to the beginning i think and again ...