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dreami, evry1 has gotta luv this! just 1 suggestion i can think of offhand... But what is more rewarding, then traveling from who you are did u mean 'than' instead ...

i got a Q 4 u if u dont mind... what is a draconian?!? i think maybe u shud try readin ur poem aloud 2 c which lines shud maybe ...

Hey, thanks everyone for all the comments! I'm going to go look at other people's stuff now... (realised I haven't commented as much as I could have done...)

hey i like it! sort of style i like 2 use... anyway the only criticisms i have r: line 3: How lucky - dont know why but this seems 2 ...

hey dont 4get me! i wanna say hi too... :xmas_wink:

BANANA!!!

i don't generally start 2 outline unless i realise that the idea is gunna turn out 2 b an ok story. then i do tons of work - mostly languages! ...

Joe once smelled sushi coming from the toilet. Ann didn't give a potatoe to Joe, because he was imagining naughty pranks involving birds poop and underwear. Joe hated pickles on ...

Okay, well, I've thought of the next verse so here's the updated version for you all. stars whispered, gates closed. fear mounted, as red sun rose. a new day dawned, ...

Okay, I did this in a bit of a rush so go easy on me... it sounds better if you say it aloud though. Why the sorrow, why the pain? ...

Joe once smelled sushi coming from the toilet. Ann didn't give a potatoe to Joe, because he was imagining naughty pranks involving birds poop and underwear. He hated pickles on ...

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Joe once smelled sushi coming from the toilet. Ann didn't give a potatoe to Joe, because he was imagining about naughty pranks

Joe once smelled sushi coming from the toilet. Ann didn't give a potatoe to Joe, because he

Joe once smelled sushi