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Re: The Law of the Street [R for language] CH.2
Hey, DM! coco here again! Boy, am I glad you've put up chapter 2, it was so awesome and let me tell you why :arrow: Firstly, your MC - I ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: The Party - chapter four
Hey, ofir! Here's my review! The Party - chapter four The gate creaked as usual as I walked the stone road to my house. The hairs on the back of ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: Artemis's Children, Pt. 2
Hey, Coco here! I don't really have anything to nit-pick here. This story sounds awesome, I especially like the names you've given your character's - very creative and they sound ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: Blood and Fire [Critiques very much welcome!]
Hey, Lisa, chocolate lover here to review :smt003 I haven't done a review like this EVER so here goes... Chapter 1 Fear, blood, and tears. The smell was so strong, ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: An Untitled Prologue
Hey, Sean! Coco here :smt003 This is really good for something that's just a collection of thoughts you've knocked together! :shock: I'll start with what I love. This is really ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: The Party - chapter three
Attolia and Canislupis have beat me to it again! I have to agree this is so much better than chapter 2, I really feel like you've got your MC back, ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: The Lake House/ Chapter 1 (Edited, again)
Hey, kr1117, coco here! I'll probably come back and give a proper review later on but right now my advice would be to break this up into paragraphs, it will ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: When the Dragons flew.
Hi Skutter11, Coco here! Hmm, I have to agree with Silentpages, this is interesting but there seems to be something missing, I can't quite put my finger on it myself. ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: The Party - chapter two
Well it seems Canislups and Attolia have said it all. Like I said in my review of your first chapter I do like this story but similar problems that occurred ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: No Name yet - please help
Hey ofir! Coco here, hoping to help with a review. Here goes... So I like this but I think that there are a few things that could be worked on: ...
May 17, 2010 -
Re: My life as a human dreamcatcher Part 1
Hey ultraviolet! Coco here, I really like this for a number of reasons. One, your narrative is really well done, simple but revealing of your MC's personality which I love ...
Apr 17, 2010 -
Re: The Law of the Street [R for language]
This is unbelievably awesome! I was honestly hooked from the start, I haven't read anything like this here so it was incredibly exciting to read. Welcome to YWS and best ...
Mar 26, 2010 -
Re: Of Loss and Love (chp.2) [newly edited]
Thanks, Nike!
Mar 24, 2010 -
Re: Classy Reviews [open]
Hey classy! Coco here again, hope your well :D I've finally posted up chapter 10 for you to look at when your not busy. I'm kinda nervous to see what ...
Mar 9, 2010 -
Re: Reviews from a Marine (Re-opened)
Hey amy! Coco here again, hope your well :D I've finally posted up chapter 10 for you to look at when your not busy. I'm kinda nervous to see what ...
Mar 9, 2010
